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TEST

Row after row
Plastic. Plastic. More plastic.
Chairs and desks
Row after row
Sit.
Sigh.

Take up a pen
Read. Contemplate. Answer
Read. Contemplate. Answer.
Read. Contemplate. Answer.
It continues
Sixty-seven times.
Read. Contemplate. Answer.
Read. Contemplate. Answer.

Pen drops.
Sigh, slouch, relax.
Check the clock
Tick, Tock.
Thirty minutes left.
Tick. Tock.
Twenty-nine minutes left.
Tick. Tock.
Time drags.

Sneeze. Cough. Sneeze.
Pens scratching.
Papers rustle.
Tap. Tap. Tap. Tap.
Pens scratch.
Papers rustle.
Tap. Tap. Tap. Tap.
Sigh. Relax. Slouch.

Ten minutes left
Tick. Tock.
Minds working.
Sneeze. Cough. Sneeze.
Sigh. Relax. Slouch.

He stares.
You stare back.
He questions quietly.
You answer.
He takes your sheet.

Shuffle.
Pen and paper gone.
Eyes look but are ignore.
Shuffling feet.
Slouching walk.

Fresh air.
Sigh.
Breathe deep.
Freedom.
Escape.
Over
Not sure if this is the correct place for this piece.
May move it to scraps

So i sat another test on Friday and finished early and wrote this.


EDIT: Well this is not going to scraps the piece is growing on em and i kinda like it now.
So i posted it on SFF World.com and got a bit of feedback from some friends of mine and made a few subtle changes . . .mainly to the 4th stanza.
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lil-ema Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2006
nice poem! you are scaring me. i've got to sit exams like that for a whole week, taking about 4 exams a day. two in the morning, two in the afternoon! :O. not good. ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh well c'est la vie!
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Tari-Xalyr Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2006   Writer
4 a day!!! :faint: OMG!!! well Good luck is the best i can offer. I've got one week left 3 exams to go., . . .
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AToxicDelight Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2006
Wow, I absolutely love the way this piece was written. The style, the technique. You did such an awesome job. I noticed that about tests too, all the rustling, people nervous. You capture the emotion perfectly, I'm in awe. :+fav: for sure, I love when poems are written in a different way, you really did a great job with this one.
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Tari-Xalyr Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2006   Writer
Thank you so much :hug:
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AToxicDelight Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2006
Its awesome. I love it. :D! :hug:
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Tari-Xalyr Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2006   Writer
lol i'm starting to love it. . i didnt at first but it's kinda growing on me
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AToxicDelight Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2006
Its a unique idea. The way that it was written. Nice job.
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Tari-Xalyr Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2006   Writer
thanks luv =) :hug:
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fallen625 Featured By Owner May 28, 2006   Writer
it totally sticks and i can envision the pain of taking exams.
good job!
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Tari-Xalyr Featured By Owner May 29, 2006   Writer
wow it's working! thanks luv =)
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BowlsOfRain Featured By Owner May 28, 2006
Ahh, fantastic... I only remember my tests from my elementary days (around the beginning of middle school I was homeschooled), but I can certainly relate to this. Wonderful rhythm, use of pattern/s, timing. I really enjoyed it! :D :) ;)
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Tari-Xalyr Featured By Owner May 29, 2006   Writer
thank you =D
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WordsintheHead Featured By Owner May 28, 2006
YES! absolutley accurate! nice work :)
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Tari-Xalyr Featured By Owner May 28, 2006   Writer
he he thanks luv =)
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anextraordinarygirl Featured By Owner May 28, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
wow! that's totally accurate!! nice job in using repetition that way, it totally works! :w00t: and like, omg so BORING!!! to take tests like that, not your poem. XD

:heart:
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Tari-Xalyr Featured By Owner May 28, 2006   Writer
Thanks for the comment luv..........be glad you do not have to sit through FIVE 3hr exams next week!
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Shufy Featured By Owner May 28, 2006
Wow. You seriously capture the feeling of what I presume to be exams. That will be my life in a couple of months *she sighs melodramatically*. Very cool.
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Tari-Xalyr Featured By Owner May 28, 2006   Writer
*pats your head* there. there. Thats my life in one weeks time!! :fear:. . .That was just a test nothing more. But still Exams are worse! they drag on more! possibly more similar themes coming as the exams begins. . .
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